Idle Banter Collaboration Thread - Writers, post here!

@krysalynne I'm overseas right now also. I find myself and others commenting on the things they miss from home. Like for some reason Japan doesn't carry original flavor Sunchips. Every other flavor but original and goshdarnit, sometimes you just crave random food that you can't have.

@Justafan Signed up again. Hopefully it was just a one time glitch.

Here are the conversations for St. Delyn's Potter's Hall.

Okay, had some serious stuff to take care of so this was on the backburner for a bit. These are the conversations for the Morag Tong in Balmora and the Misc. Street Dwellers in Suran. Hope everyone enjoys what I've written and I'm pumped to still have a few sections left to write after this. Please tell me what you think!

Also, anyone able to take Khuul off of my hands for me? After the Suran Misc. Street Dwellers being so long I'm dreading the 30+ person trainwreck that is Balmora's.

Here is the Hall of Justice (all the areas: Hall of Justice, Ordinator Barracks, Office of the Watch, Justice Offices, and Secret Library).

@Eridanus

You can probably just remove your name from the spreadsheet for Khuul. Someone will eventually pick it up.

Here are the conversations for St. Delyn's Glassworker's Hall.

@maddog ... lol ... I just got a chance to actually read your Black Hawn Down reference.  I had completely forgotten about that bit of hilarity ... I've watched that movie once, but not since I deployed the first time.  Gah, I need a better sense of humor.  

I've been so worried about not having the same dialogue as in the Hawkmoth Garrison, it's made me go ... "dur ... which way did he go George?"  Seriously, so frustrating, but you and twentyengine have helped jumpstart my synapses ... they may be misfiring, but hey, they're firing, that's the most important part.

Thank you again and I'll get something posted in the next few days ... barring any more issues >.> <.< ...

Cheers!

Krys

@krysalynne   In the words of C. J Cherryh, “It is perfectly okay to write garbage—as long as you edit brilliantly.” ;)

HA!  Got some done ... *claps hands and dances in circles* ^_^ ... (don't judge me >.> <.<) ... lol ... okay, hopefully this doesn't suck, but I've made some headway on the Imperial Garrison/Commission.  I ran a spell check as a preemptive measure, but I know it doesn't check for the Tamriel names properly, so please let me know if I missed any ... and, as always ^_^ ... let me know any suggestions to make it better.  At the bottom of the page are a couple of random lines, pretty much one per character to say to self.  I'm thinking I would like to add at least one more line per character so they have a couple of random thought bubbles each, but we'll see.

Okay, enough rambling ... Thank you!

Cheers!

Krys

Well, here we go. First submission for The Pilgrim's Rest. I'd like a little criticism if at all possible. :P. I might add more if you guys don't think its lengthy enough, although right now my brain's dead. So, go at it, let the merciless editing begin!

@O'lar Hammerfell

I really like the interpretations that you've given the characters. A few critiques: (1) Make sure to clean up the punctuation. This is pretty important, since voice actors will be reading the lines. (2) In the Mundrila/Ales conversation, Mundrila's line "By Oblivion it was!" sounds more like she was happy with the trip. I think you were probably going for something similar to "Like hell it was," but it's confusing as is. Also, flying rats makes me think of bats more readily than cliffracers, but that might just be me (3) Would the Ashlanders really care about someone insulting the slave trade? Even if they have slaves themselves (and I do not remember if that is the case), the trade itself is more of a House Dunmer thing. (4) Selkirnemus's concluding line in the slave market conversation does not seem to flow well with the earlier lines, since he was originally warning Miniel against insulting the slave trade, but then starts talking about how profitable it is. (5) Would a Redguard regularly drink mead? It seems more like a Nordic drink.

Also, the idle banter project is not really about lines spoken to the player, but those that are overheard. Don't just delete these, though, as they might be of use later.

Overall, I think you are skilled at creating interesting premises for your conversations, and I hope we will see more.

@krysalynne

It seems like you're going for a "bored bunch of garrison soldiers" sort of feel here. If so, I'd say it's working pretty well.

@TY, your suggestions are all valid. I noticed many of them myself(after I submitted it >_<). I'm going to go ahead and submit the fixed lines, and I might just add a few more soon. 

Edit: If you didn't see this line when you downloaded this file, it was the wrong one. I forgot to save the new one when I uploaded the first time. And thus, what you were likely looking at was only half fixed. 

I can say that with very few exceptions, greeting lines will not be included for these characters.  If you have good greeting ideas, you can use them for greetings between NPC instead of to the player.  Idle banter lines may (sparingly) reference the player, but as a general rule this is just to flesh out the environments and make it seem as though the world doesn't revolve around the player.

Here are conversations for St. Delyn's Abbey.

Conversations for St. Delyn's Plaza

Think I'm just about finished with Hlaalu Canton Waistworks.  One of these characters ties in with a quest I wrote up for crafting ebony armor, so I wanted him to keep the same vibe.

Here are the conversations for St. Delyn's Waistworks.

The reason I made Galbedir good at enchanting, is, well, She is. She is the person you would go to for enchanting, but I really do see your point. I will work on some changes and post them all here soon.

Okay, here is my overhaul Idle Banter. 

This Post Contains: Rat In The Pot, Mages Guild(Balmora), and Southwall Cornerclub.

Hey guys, I didn't get much work done on this, but there are some pretty good chances I wont be able to continue- so the very beginnings of my dialogue for Gnaar Mok

https://docs.google.com/document/d/18RVpU2mrK19uy2DHXtkr3XDace_4_2K8YK3vyvGhTzE/edit?usp=sharing

Here are all of the areas in the Hall of Wisdom (the Hall of Wisdom lobby, Canon Quarters, and Canon Offices. The Library of Vivec was submitted separately). All of the characters here are pretty irrelevant to anything in the actual game, so I developed personalities based on what little extraneous information there is.

Here are the final conversations for St. Delyn.

Here is the High Fane from Vivec.

Here are the Maar Gan - Miscellaneous conversations.

Here are the Maar Gan Shrine conversations.

Here is the dialog for the external area of the Temple Canton in Vivec. Barring suggested changes, this completes that section.

Here is Maar Gan Andus Tradehouse.

Here are the Maar Gan Outpost idle comments (there are no paired conversations).

Here are the modified conversations for St. Delyn.

Here are the modified conversations for Maar Gan.

Here is the Armiger's Stronghold in Molag Mar.

Attached are pretty much all the idle banter lines for the Redoran Canton.

St. Olms Canton Plaza.

Busheeus:

1: No. I am not a dark elf slave.

2: Have you seen my spear? I thought I left it over there.

3: You have questions? 

Falso Sadrys:

1: Hlaalu welcomes you outlander.

2: Speak Sera.

3:No matter how hard I try that girl wont leave me alone.

Ginadura Andrethi:

1: Oh my Falso how could I confess my love?

2: By Vivec! I forgot to pay my taxes!

3: Ahh crap! I think I should get my Kwama bite checked out.

Girvani Sedas:

1: I guess netch leather isnt strong enough to withstand arrows. Damn I should have known.

2: Hmph! stupid canal works almost died down there!

3: I should get some of that new fancy imperial ale the guards have been talking about.

SHORT PLAZA CONVERSATIONS

Ginadura Andrethi, and Falso Sadrys

Ginadura: Hey falso, Want to go to the conerclub and ge-

Falso: No thank you, Im busy.

Ginadura: Ugh Fine, Later perhaps?

Busheeus, and Falso Sadrys

Falso: Hey lizard!

Busheeus: Im not your slave, Busheeus has no words for you.

Falso: I hate Argonian Filth

Girvani Sedas, and Ginadura:

Ginadura: Excuse me Muthsera.

Girvani: Yes?

Ginadura: Where do you think is the best corner club in Vivec?

Girvani: Lizards head For sure.

Ginadura: Thanks serjo, Ill check it out.

Here is what I've done for Sjorvar Horse-Mouth's house out in the West Gash so far.  He lives alone, so I wrote some things he could mutter to himself. 

Sjorvar- I need a vacation.  

Sjorvar- What where they thinking?  Sticking me out here alone to stop the Smugglers, the Camonna Tong.  They have caves everywhere.  How do they expect me to handle it all by myself?  

Sjorvar- Damn.  Out of repair hammers.  

Sjorvar- Next time I get to town I've got to  remember to buy more repair hammers.  Candles starting to burn down too.  Should get some spares while I'm there.  

Sjorvar- Almost had them.  If I'd only been there a few hours before I'd have got them.  Eh, who am I kidding.  Just a drop in the ocean.  

Sjorvar- Huh, who's that?  

Sjorvar- Where'd I put that again?

Sjorvar- Where to try next?  

Sjorvar- Sigh (Sounds worn down and tired)  

Sjorvar- Hmm?  

Sjorvar- What next?  

Sjorvar- Just a drop in the ocean.  Sigh.  

Sjorvar- Too slow...

Sjorvar- Too late...

Sjorvar- What now?  



I submit this for your review.  Suggestions for revisions or additions are welcome. 

Edit- It occurs to me now that there are no repair hammers in Skyrim.  I don't know in what ways game mechanics will be changed in Skywind from Skyrim, but should I remove the references to repair hammers in my next revision? 

These are some idle mutterings as well as conversation for the Saint Olms Tanners and Miners Hall for the Trader Nivos Drivam, the Commoner Noldrasi Bedas, and the Ordinator who stands guard there.  

First, Single lines for the Ordinator

Ordinator- I'm watching you.  

Ordinator- Need to get that left gauntlet repaired when I go off duty.  I think I see a crack in it.  

Ordinator- I wonder what the plumes on these helmets come from.  Never thought to ask before.  

Ordinator- Damn is this ever boring.  Same thing every day.  Almost wish somebody would try something.  

Ordinator- Can't wait till I get off duty.  

Ordinator- She's always here.  Won't she ever make up her mind?  Or is she here to see him?  (Referring to Noldrasi Bedas)


Single lines for Noldrasi Bedas

Noldrasi- I don't know...

Noldrasi- I've lost my coin Pur- oh wait, wrong pocket.  

Noldrasi- Hmm...

Single lines for Nivos Drivam

Nivos- Is that a new customer?  

Nivos- Need a new supplier.  I'll run out of glass at this rate.  

Nivos- Need to restock soon.  

Nivos- Could be worse, all things considered.  


Conversations


Noldrasi- You know, you're the only merchant I know who deals in armor, but not weapons.  You never did say why.  

Nivos- It... It's personal.  Really, I wish you'd stop bringing this up.  I can't, not... I just can't anymore... Not after that.  

Noldrasi- After what?  

Nivos- Nothing!  I'm sorry.  Look, have you made up your mind yet.  

Noldrasi- Still looking.  You know, you'll have to tell me someday.  

Nivos- Sigh... You're must stubborn women I've ever met, and the least decisive.  

Noldrasi- What?!

Nivos- Well it does seem like you spend all day here.  

Noldrasi- I'm just a careful buyer.  

Nivos- Yeah, sure.  

Noldrasi- Hmph.  

--

Noldrasi- I wonder if anyone has tried to make armor using ruby before.  

Nivos- I think I heard of an outlander that does, or has anyway.  I forget his name, William... something.  I can't remember.  I don't know how someone would use it in armor myself, well except as an inlay of course.  

Noldrasi- It certainly would draw attention.  

Nivos- That much is certain.  



That is it for the first draft.  Of course suggestions for revisions or additions are always welcome.

Here is Sjorvar's dialogue with the directed revisions.  I haven't made any additions yet, but something I've been thinking about is should I write anything he might mutter commenting on the current weather? 

Things like "Looks like rain" or "That's some heavy fog rolling in" or "Damn it's hot today" and so on.  Or would that be outside the scope of what I should be doing?

And here is the next version for The Saint Olms Tanners and Miners Hall.  I've made a few revisions and added another conversation. 

About being careful not to reference previous conversations, I'm trying to give a sense that this is something they have gone over multiple times that she just won't let go.  I get what you say about referencing other conversations I add though.  I have tweaked it a bit in this version. 

As always, suggestions for revisions and additions are always welcome. 

Edit- An idea I've just had is adding conversations about quests that you have active that they might reasonably have heard about.  Like the one about murders in Vivec.  When it is active they could talk about it.  And then when you complete it they could talk about how glad they are that it is over.  Let me know what you think and if you like the concept I'll put it in the next revision. 

Wow I cannot believe what all happened in the two weeks of my absence, everybody seems so hard at work.

I have claimed Llethri Manor, here is the first version

Here is the next revision for both.  You didn't say anything for the comments about the weather for Sjorvar, so I just put a few at the end of the document.  They can easily be removed if need be. 

Justafan

Hey, just thought I might as well post this, I finally finished the dialog for miscellaneous ashlanders! And they're even in fully fleshed-out Dunmeri! Whoa! 

Have a gander if ya like, and maybe even some feedback!

These look awesome!  I love the way you worded in red to fit the speech, and the attention to detail regarding the grammar is splendid!  I know how hard it is to make translations like that :P

Okay, this isn't complete, but here is an update for the Miscellaneous section of Ebonheart (only section missing) and also some added dialogue for the Hawkmoth Garrison and Argonian Mission.  I just finished my night class, so I have a little more time opening up, but I wanted to get something up here (proof that I am still working ^_^).  Please let me know any feedback / suggestions.  I really appreciate it and have a great night/day everyone!

Cheers!

Krys

Here are the idle comments for St, Olms Brewers & Fishmongers and Farmers & Laborers.

Here are the conversations for Balmora's Eight Plates.

Here's one that can be used by every npc

"Saw another mudcrab the other day..."